The Lifeless Poem

I went out and bought things,

they couldn't take your place.

I made myself so busy,

but couldn't keep the pace.

 

I ate 'til I was stuffed,

but still, I felt so empty.

I knew times would be tough,

but wasn't expecting so many.

 

How slowly time ticks by,

as I wait for mine to come.

How gracefully birds fly,

I wish that I was one.

 

I anticipate each night,

for you to visit in dreams.

Then I wake to the light,

a viscious world it seems.

 

I do all of these things,

but they don't bring you home.

I write down all these words,

but they're just a lifeless poem.

A lot with a little

D.B.,

 

Thank you for your submission. This poem does a lot in a short amount of time, which is definitely a strength. I really like the last sentence. In a short space, and with few words, the poem tells a long and painful story. There is loss and coping, then we are left feeling the narrator's sense of defeat. Well done.

 

I hope to read more of your work in the future,

 

l.d.

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